After the unconstructive acrimony my previous logline received, I think it'd be a good thing to move on to this next one, which totally has a 0% of getting me into any pointless arguments with anyone... Full premise:
After we leave Earth, an alien species colonizes it. A few centuries later, mankind returns to find Earth terraformed. Mankind takes "its home" back, and subjugates the alien people who can no longer travel to other planets. We follow as the sparks of rebellion begin to flicker.
A pretty clear allegory for a certain thing, but I'd rather not anyone argue with me over the thing it's an allegory for. That said, I do want to say a bit more about the inspiration for this.
So I've made it clear in the past that I'm an unrepentant nerd. One comic I know of, Fables (which you may know better as the source material for The Wolf Among Us), is also an allegory for this thing, but from another perspective. As I pondered on it, I figured that there's nothing that really presents the framing of this situation as I or someone of my ilk would. Not to dunk on Fables or anything--as a work of art, I understand that many people like it, I just think that the other side deserves to be heard too.
Thoughts (again, no political arguments here please)?
I'm getting discouraged. I'm too sick to work outside my home, so I started writing. I heard selling quality scripts can be done from a gurney(something like that). I think writing them can be done on a gurney, but getting them sold is a different story. That's not why I learned how to do it, but I feel like working out stories and showing them to others is me working for free. Only problem is, not writing is harder for me than writing. I think I'm going to start writing songs.
This is my very first logline I've written. I didn't really do my research and I've looked at very few examples, most of which were posted on here. I just thought I'd write one on a whim and see what feedback I can get! Constructive criticisms is welcome!! This definitely isnt my best story, but it's I think it's a quite good one. The idea came from a dream I had and hopefully the logline doesnt sound boring, as I dont intend for the actual screenplay to be boring at all!
I’ve always been fascinated by this aspect and I can’t explain why that scene works so well.
The relationship between Will and his father is rarely explored or talked about in the film. I think it’s only briefly brought into the spotlight when Williams’ character reads his files. And that’s about it.
But somehow, this little undisclosed part of Will’s life carries the biggest payoff in the story.
I've been working on and posting about a screenplay I've been working on for a while now. I'm decently happy with where it is right now but the story doesn't feel like enough. I wanna expand the screenplay and the story but I'm not sure what else I can add to it. Here's a link to the screenplay. I'd love it if anyone could give me some opinions on where I could go with this.
Big warning: This is my first script, I'm not the most skilled, and I'm a youngin (15) so my creation probably isn't the best out of this whole site but I'd love to hear some feedback from the members of this sub